Aurelia, Green Mage

[Intoxicated Crayon]

Aurelia (You could probably change the name since it resembles Aurea's.)
The Green Mage(So?)
Intelligence; Hallowed Order

Story: 'I've been quite interested in magick, it's quite fitting too. My father was quite the mage when I was a child, he never did attend an academy, you know how old farts act when they are jealous... My father taught me the do's and don'ts of magick and I think I haven't kept my word, if you don't know, I was five when I made that promise. People have always mentioned I'm quite the prodigy, but magick is more like a joke to me-- I prefer to amuse myself with magick instead of increasing the work I receive to learn useless techniques I know. I was almost accepted into the academy, but if you know me-- I killed my chances after some actions of mine, to this day I don't regret them. Now I'm getting burnt to a crisp in this Desert with the Empty-On-The-Inside Order, Got anything to say Academy?'

Level 1 Skill: - Condition Removal and Buff
Hex

• Aurelia purges a target of their conditions however, her next X(X > 4) attacks will inflict a one of the random conditions she purged from the target every time she attacks. If the target has no conditions, Y(Small) damage is dealt. (If the skill is a bit pathetic, the conditions could be place on her too until she attacks X times for some synergy) (Note: Stun/Knockback/Mute cannot be transferred in this manner because they negate it's effect > >)

Level 1 Skill: - Passive
Release/Discharge

• Every X seconds, Aurelia purges herself of her conditions and releases a bolt of arcane magick that deals Y(Number of Conditions on Aurelia x 25-50) and bounces for each condition that is removed in this matter. Also, if Aurelia is suffering from no conditions, her life and mana regenerate a bit faster.(This probably could be her ultimate/ Each bolt can deal ruin if you'd like, It doesn't really effect synergy)

Level 1 Skill: - DPS and Effect
Recoil

• Aurelia smothers an ally in unstable energies. When the target is attacked, one of it's conditions are transferred to the attacking unit and the duration of the condition is multiplied by X. This effect lasts for Y seconds or ends after the target has been attacked Z times. If the target has no conditions, it is ruined.

Level 6 Ultimate: - Activated Passive
Vex

• Aurelia begins to channel her unstable magicks around which drains her mana periodically. Once activated, you deal X extra attacks for each condition the target is suffering. One random condition Aurelia(Or The Target, whichever is best) is suffering from is shortened whenever she attacks with this active. Passively gives her a Y% chance to deal 3 attacks to a target if she is suffering from Z conditions.

Comments? No, Really?

[Rising_Dusk]

What exactly is a green mage?

[Oxygen]

Oh! Oh! I spotted one!



EDIT: This is why you don't let me skin.

[Cold Phoenix]

Ohmg are those Treas growing out of his head? so badass he must be a tree hero"

[TheDeathstalker]

(Breaking the string of whitty comments out of sheer boredom)

First things first... stop posting heroes with random pretty colors. It hurts my eyes/brain (although my soul is a bit better for such things, but meh). On a more serious note, it actually makes the hero just hard to read. Another formatting comment is that your skills are cluttered. If you look at some of the more elegant (elegant in the scientific way, meaning simple and concise) heroes, you'll see that it's on average one line per skill, if even, but it's all very clear. If you want to clerify something, that's what the comments section is for (not saying whether or not you want comments, as your "Comments? No, Really?" bit seems to imply).

Onto the hero!

Hex - Condition purge
Discharge - Condition purge
Recoil - Condition moving
Vex - DPS

Either the skills aren't clear enough for me to see any non-trivial synergy (yes, of course, moving conditions onto enemies is what ALL skills do, doing it in an interesting way between two+ skills is a synergy), or there isn't any. The ult doesn't fit the theme very well, it just gives the hero a punch, which kinda defeats the whole purpose. Look at the ultimates of other heroes, they augment the rest of the hero, they don't just go "and now i magically deal 10x normal damage." Overall, I think the weakness lies in inelegance. Your hero is designed around moving conditions, so actually design it around that. In and of itself, Hex is fun, Discharge is boring (as a passive, as a skill it's a bit better, but needs work), Recoil feels meh, and I've already gone over the Ult.

To be fair, conceptually you are at a disadvantage, as Tornne is already the perfect plague-bringer, but it can still be done. Oh, one more thing, on all your skills, cut the "if the skill doesn't have the right conditions, X" shit, because it's just clutter to make the hero feel more rounded but not.

And just because it can't be said enough: simplicity and elegance are the ways to a good hero. I think...

[Sabertooth]

A green mage is really a support mage. There's 4 mage classes in FF:
Black Mage
White Mage
Blue Mage
Green Mage

And get rid of the annoying-as-hell colors. Seriously.

[Rising_Dusk]

I made the hero suggestion format for a reason. Anyways, if a green mage is a 'support mage,' it sounds like an awful boring hero to play as. Not to mention, doesn't exactly look or feel any clever or interesting, just... Generic and bleh.

[TheDeathstalker]

Don't recall Green actually... it's...

Black - Heavy damage
Blue - Monster Skills
Red - Black&White (and debuffs)
White - Healer

Scratch that, a quick Wiki reveals that Green Mage is another name for Time Mages... Still doesn't work though.

[Rising_Dusk]

Just going over the hero's skills, they seem a bit all over the place.

[Akruta]

Well in FF:TA 2 Green Mages Use a bunch of Buff and debuff things... And so do Red Mages... But mot as many as the Green Mage.

[Rising_Dusk]

Great, so in DoE they would... Use conditions? Does that mean the bane is saving trees?

[Vinnam]

Great, so in DoE they would... Use conditions? Does that mean the bane is saving trees?

Of course! It all makes sense now! I knew those tree-huggers weren't up to no good!

Hex has some potential,though it seems a bit too convoluted in its present incarnation.

Release/Discharge has some potential, again, though it also seems a bit too convoluted in its present state.

Recoil has potential to be a "bait and switch" maneuver, if you can somehow get the target afflicted with a condition of your choice.

Vex seems a bit under-powered and a bit limiting, since some heros RELY on durations staying longer on them.