[44 Images Warning] DoE Story

[assassingao]

Inspired by Konlhon's DotA-cartoon. And the last pic was inspired by someone saying "I would cry at the sight of Vela playing Tennis with Sozen"

[Rectifier]

Can you rapidshare or mediafire the set or something like that, viewing 44 pictures online without being in a clickable series is unwieldy at best.

[Phox]

Yeah, I kinda got annoyed having to scroll down from porn adds for each pic.

[assassingao]

Ok.

http://rapidshare.com/files/113599636/S ... c.zip.html

[Deschain]

The story was.. unimpressive. Still compared to what dota can mesh up it is probably far more coherent and intelligent story.

Also you need to work on your English a bit. I could detect few errors (and since I'm not as eloquent or grammatically correct as vesu or Kaome...) means your writing really sucks.

[Fledermaus]

xD

[Deschain]

Count they at least show some pussy? =/ -drunk ftw wwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwe

Wo?

[Daryll-The-Damned]

I think he was drunk. People should show some restraint. <_<

Anyway, this was a pretty nice story, couple things however...

The player's text really distracted me, and messed with the suspension of belief.
I liked how you made note of the fact that the bane and order aren't really "good and evil", I think you should have focused on that a bit more.
Some of the sentences didn't really make sense, that was probably mis-translations or phrases that don't translate well though.

All in all, nice job. You managed to capture some pretty awesome scenes.

[assassingao]

Yeah, I was going to use the present tenses in the first few scenes.

But I changed my mind and used many past tenses.



And I think my Thai translation was worse.


The story changed from serious to crazy.

[Loki]

For one screenshot, they like to type fast, lol.

[assassingao]

For one screenshot, they like to type fast, lol.

Yeah, they really like to flood XD.

[Rising_Dusk]

Imagine if Kaome did this with his stories.

[assassingao]

It'd be orgasm.